I agree with ChrisTime on everything he has said. I have hypnotized people and I have also been hypnotized and I love how relaxed I feel when I wake out of it. Ity is like being in a deep sleep for a half hour, sometimes less, but waking up as if you have just had the best eight hours of sleep you Read more… have ever had. I really enjoyed going back to past life experiences. Hypnosis can change bad habits and bring out deeply repressed memories. I learned in College as part of my degree in Psychology and it definitely needs to be performed by someone who knows what they are doing. One fact that some have teased me about is being afraid that the hypnotist will be able to place a trigger in their mind and control them. This is a not true, but it makes for great roleplay!

i am a freelance writer and I think it sucked. KIDDING! You did really well for your first time. The editor in me wanted to change a few things, but well done. The biggest thing you need to watch is changing points of view in the middle of a scene. It is confusing. The sentence "She looked Read more… longingly at the chair," would sound better if you modified it with 'empty', In my opinion. Sir!