x-**** Posted March 24 Posted March 24 (edited) I am the one that you saw first I am the laughter that turns your head I am the eyes that tell a story I am the pages of your favorite book I am the silky petals of a rose I am the rain that beats in your heart I am the the one that makes our first kiss your last I am the one you see as you dream I am the one you see when you wake I am the one that makes you think I am the one who knows what you’re thinking I am the one that knows you I am the one that supports you I am your best friend I am your forever ~BlueDiamond 💙💎 Edited March 24 by x-BlueDiamond-x Added a line
Deleted Member Posted March 25 Posted March 25 “I am the one that makes our first kiss your last”. What a beautiful line. (You wrote “the” twice, but the piece loses none of its beauty however).
x-**** Posted March 25 Author Posted March 25 8 hours ago, intellectualruffian said: “I am the one that makes our first kiss your last”. What a beautiful line. (You wrote “the” twice, but the piece loses none of its beauty however). Thank you for your kind words. Now only if I could edit the second “the” *sighs*. Perhaps I should read my scribbles a fourth time before posting.
Deleted Member Posted March 25 Posted March 25 6 minutes ago, x-BlueDiamond-x said: Thank you for your kind words. Now only if I could edit the second “the” *sighs*. Perhaps I should read my scribbles a fourth time before posting. Apologies if I come across as being like the grammar police. It really is a lovely piece. That’s the standout line for me, and likely how I noticed the minor error in the first place.
x-**** Posted March 25 Author Posted March 25 45 minutes ago, intellectualruffian said: Apologies if I come across as being like the grammar police. It really is a lovely piece. That’s the standout line for me, and likely how I noticed the minor error in the first place. No apologies needed, I am the grammar police 🤭 Speaking properly is important, you can never make another first impression.
Deleted Member Posted March 25 Posted March 25 4 minutes ago, x-BlueDiamond-x said: No apologies needed, I am the grammar police 🤭 Speaking properly is important, you can never make another first impression. A woman after my own heart. Apology retracted then 😉😊.
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