Anticipation (an Fdom/Msub story)

[Fl****]

His knuckles turned white as he gripped the stearing wheel, turning into the parking lot of her apartment building. His breath shaky and his mind racing. His futile attempts to gather his thoughts and steady himself as obvious as can be. He reached behind his drivers seat to the back of the car, picking up the duffle bag. The contents were mere leather and chain, yet it fealt like stones. It was impossibly heavy. As the door opens and his shoes meet the pavement, his eye catches the light illuminating her room, clashing with the ca***ing aura of the moon and stars above. He marched toward the stairs and as he inched closer toward her apartment door his breath grew increasingly weak. The week had been long and exhausting. He had been bruised, it fealt like he was drowning under water. All he can do is blink the discomfort away.
Gasping for air and readying his hand to knock on the door. Words unspoken and paragraphs race through his concious. A chaotic almagomation that is both simple and unconcievable. The door opens, she invites him in. She tells him to sit while she looks as to what he brought. The only thing his ear can pick up is the rummaging of her hands through the many materials that lay in the bag. Her lips spike as she grins. "You bought everything I told you to." Her words filling the air between them. He nods. "Good, I got you a gift". She stands from the bag and walks to the dining room table. She picks up a collar and beckons him closer. He walks toward her, puzzled and anxious, exhausted still. As he arrives their eyes meet. She wraps her hands around his neck and fascines the decoration upon him. As her fingernails wrap around the leather her tug ***s a gasp out of him. A lifebringing gasp, he can finally breathe. The lifesaver that dragged him above water. Now a branding on his neck. He is hers.

[Fl****]

Usually I try to put up discussions or find insight into my ***rs in the community. But I wanted to try giving yall some content to consume, depending on how its recieved I may do more :)

[Fl****]

*i spelled steering wheel wrong oh man thats embarrassing*

[Th****]

You need grammarly bro

[Th****]

Felt* not fealt 😆

[Fl****]

Just now, Thathockeyguy said:

You need grammarly bro

For real and for true

[Th****]

I don't mean it disrespectfully suggesting it. You write better stories than I can!

[Th****]

It has helped me though!

[Fl****]

1 minute ago, Thathockeyguy said:

I don't mean it disrespectfully suggesting it. You write better stories than I can!

Oh dude no offense take, it's just an objective truth XD glad you liked it despite the poor spelling!

[Th****]

Keep writing and see where it goes

[Th****]

Don't let the thought of touching on a subject that is not recognized deter you. Stay true to what you like to speak on.

[Fl****]

5 minutes ago, Thathockeyguy said:

Don't let the thought of touching on a subject that is not recognized deter you. Stay true to what you like to speak on.

Theres always room to improve, this is a simple and easy critique solved by checking grammer a little better. I'm just glad the story was still enjoyable nevertheless! The next one will be much more grammatically correct. Thanks friend. o7

[Sa****]

i thought it a good start to what could become an excellent story there is so much more you could continue with 💜