Water

[De****]

A submissive is water. Strong, powerful, deep.

A submissive bends, moves, forms to the world around them.

A submissive can be calm, rapid, turbulent as needed.

A submissive will move in ways they are commanded.

A submissive is never weak. Like water they hold infinite power.

A submissive chooses to bend to the Dominant, but it is only by choice.

[Deleted Member]

Perfect analogy

[Da****]

Amazing simply amazing

[Ta****]

Hear, Hear.

Today, I prep my gear and enjoy the cooling, calm of Poseidon's realm.

[os****]

Nice I love the adapted Bruce Lee quote .

[Etiam_mi_rex]

DenverBunny, reading through your prose poetry, it feels like using ocean instead of water might hit harder. Water can also be weak in so little as a droplet or creek. I think with the verses you've used describing power, personality, and temperment, the word ocean feels more suitable. Just some constructive criticism.

Also, it feels like you could have expanded more. The creativity was flowing, and then it cuts off kind of quickly. I think you should do another version, only really pack the essence of who a sub is into it. Help us, your audience, really see the depth of you as a sub.

[De****]

30 minutes ago, Etiam_mi_rex said:

DenverBunny, reading through your prose poetry, it feels like using ocean instead of water might hit harder. Water can also be weak in so little as a droplet or creek. I think with the verses you've used describing power, personality, and temperment, the word ocean feels more suitable. Just some constructive criticism.

Also, it feels like you could have expanded more. The creativity was flowing, and then it cuts off kind of quickly. I think you should do another version, only really pack the essence of who a sub is into it. Help us, your audience, really see the depth of you as a sub.

A drop of water will chip away at a mountain, eventually. Water is not weak in any form.

[Etiam_mi_rex]

No, DenverBunny. A single droplet can't erode a mountain on its own. It needs pressure. Raging floods and large bodies of water are classic metaphors used to symbolize might, power, and serenity because of the kinetic energy built up within itself. I recommended 'ocean' to replace 'water' because of the imagery you were trying to convey in the verses.

All good art undergoes its own unique process of development. I really think your poem has that artistic potential of introducing unseasoned doms and subs to the very real power an experience sub brings.

If you weren't looking for critiques, why did you post it? What kind of feedback were you looking for?

[Da****]

5 hours ago, Etiam_mi_rex said:

No, DenverBunny. A single droplet can't erode a mountain on its own. It needs pressure. Raging floods and large bodies of water are classic metaphors used to symbolize might, power, and serenity because of the kinetic energy built up within itself. I recommended 'ocean' to replace 'water' because of the imagery you were trying to convey in the verses.

All good art undergoes its own unique process of development. I really think your poem has that artistic potential of introducing unseasoned doms and subs to the very real power an experience sub brings.

If you weren't looking for critiques, why did you post it? What kind of feedback were you looking for?

If you weren't looking for critiques of your feedback on OP's art, why did you post it? Water doesn't need pressure to erode, only motion.

[De****]

3 hours ago, DadddddyScott said:

If you weren't looking for critiques of your feedback on OP's art, why did you post it? Water doesn't need pressure to erode, only motion.

Thanks for pointing out the hypocrisy. ❤️Such a weird assumption he makes that I posted for his critiques.

[Etiam_mi_rex]

3 hours ago, DadddddyScott said:

If you weren't looking for critiques of your feedback on OP's art, why did you post it? Water doesn't need pressure to erode, only motion.

I'm fine with someone rebutting my critique as long as they have something intelligent to add. What makes you think I have a problem with criticism.

What creates motion? Pressure/***. Thereby, what I originally said was correct.

[Etiam_mi_rex]

19 minutes ago, DenverBunny said:

Thanks for pointing out the hypocrisy. ❤️Such a weird assumption he makes that I posted for his critiques.

My assumption isn't that you post for 'my' criticism. But you post for a reason. That was my underlining question. If you aren't open to friend feedback, what was the point of posting?

[Da****]

Hey, it's not that deep (pun intended). You didn't get the hydrology right regarding pressure, it's velocity that erodes; otherwise the bottom of the ocean would be constantly eroded. You didn't improve the imagery, since the ocean is a vastly different metaphor than water on its own. I'd love to see what you write comparing subs to the ocean, but outside that just chalk it up to learning, we're all here to get better.

[Etiam_mi_rex]

3 hours ago, DadddddyScott said:

Hey, it's not that deep (pun intended). You didn't get the hydrology right regarding pressure, it's velocity that erodes; otherwise the bottom of the ocean would be constantly eroded. You didn't improve the imagery, since the ocean is a vastly different metaphor than water on its own. I'd love to see what you write comparing subs to the ocean, but outside that just chalk it up to learning, we're all here to get better.

I'm asking to drop this so as not to embarrass yourself further. In order for erosion to occur, water functions as a wedge even at the molecular level. In order for a wedge to be effective, it needs ***.

Motion, which is none descript, has no explanatory use other than to signify a direction. Velocity is s***d + direction. This also does not describe the erosion process. It just describes the rate the erosion is happening.

The bottom of the ocean, in many ways, is constantly eroding. The problem is that the pressures of the ocean are countered by the resistance of the solid earth. The physical material can't be broken down further because of the gravitational limit.

It baffles me as to why you and she seem to be bothered by my suggestion to use different wording. This poem could be really, really good. I haven't heard anyone refer to a sub's strength in such a way before. Using what I think are very accurate metaphorical prose.

[Da****]

If you still fail to grasp the difference between static pressure and the motion of water, I don't think I can explain it to you. Her original metaphor, that the impact of the moving water slowly erodes even rock, even as the immediate impact is felt more by the water, is a beautiful one. I look forward to reading yours!

[Etiam_mi_rex]

1 hour ago, DadddddyScott said:

If you still fail to grasp the difference between static pressure and the motion of water, I don't think I can explain it to you. Her original metaphor, that the impact of the moving water slowly erodes even rock, even as the immediate impact is felt more by the water, is a beautiful one. I look forward to reading yours!

I told you to stop before you made a fool of yourself. I literally explained the cause of static pressure in regards to the ocean floor. You don't need to explain it to me because you clearly don't understand it and will fuck it up.

[Etiam_mi_rex]

1 hour ago, DadddddyScott said:

If you still fail to grasp the difference between static pressure and the motion of water, I don't think I can explain it to you. Her original metaphor, that the impact of the moving water slowly erodes even rock, even as the immediate impact is felt more by the water, is a beautiful one. I look forward to reading yours!

It's also not for me to rewrite her poem. I made a suggestion and explained my reasoning. She shot it down. Why I have to explain this to you again is astounding at this point. It must be so taxing for someone to be your sub. Having to explain themselves to you over and over.

[Da****]

🤣

[Un****]

9 hours ago, Etiam_mi_rex said:

My assumption isn't that you post for 'my' criticism. But you post for a reason. That was my underlining question. If you aren't open to friend feedback, what was the point of posting?

hey "intellectual guy" whats an ocean made of?
Water.

Water will literally erode a mountain.
Its not always an ocean.
go be a blow hard elsewhere.

[Un****]

Trust, my baby bunny knows all the words. she chooses her own.
observe or move on,
DONT TOUCH THE FUCKING ART 🤣

[De****]

2 minutes ago, UnicornFury said:

Trust, my baby bunny knows all the words. she chooses her own.
observe or move on,
DONT TOUCH THE FUCKING ART 🤣

Thank you Daddy, if I meant ocean I would have said ocean. I said water because I meant water. I meant a river, a lake, a torrent of rain, a trickle from a creek that cuts into land over hundreds of years. I meant water. ❤️

[De****]

On 7/7/2026 at 1:50 AM, Etiam_mi_rex said:

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The moral, hun, is the way you came on here. You gave suggestions, unasked for, in a verbiage that implied D/s. You spoke like a Dom to a sub or a Mentor to a student. You don’t have my consent to talk to me in that way. It’s the way you spoke. It was “I know all things let me guide you little sub attitude.” I don’t need nor desire your guidance. I didn’t post with the intention of refining my prose so I could submit it for the kinky prose Olympics. You got called out on it, multiple times, but multiple people. If you truly believe dripping water won’t lead to erosion, you didn’t pass middle school. 

[Da****]

11 hours ago, DenverBunny said:

Thanks for pointing out the hypocrisy. ❤️Such a weird assumption he makes that I posted for his critiques.

I just ended up blocking, there's no reasoning sometimes. Thank you again for the post, add me if you want so I can be subscribed!

[BlueGrace]

I liked your poem! I hope you write more and post!

[De****]

33 minutes ago, BlueGrace said:

I liked your poem! I hope you write more and post!

Thank you beautiful ❤️